GOALS:
W.A.L.T - retell stories in our own words.
- Organise our writing with a clear beginning, middle and end.
- Use google apps for online writing.
The story:
The kids who ruled the neighborhood
In Shantytown there was a big bully, his name was Sean. When I am talking big I don’t mean big I mean enormous. He simply ruled the neighbourhood. One day he was waiting on the street for a bus to come. When it finally came he picked it up with his bare hands and lifted it way above his head. He started shaking the bus then suddenly he threw it onto the ground, the kids came out looking rather dazed. He caught hold of one of the kids and said. ”Did you bring my lunch today?” The kid shuddered “Um,you can have all my chicken nuggets Sean.”Thanks little friend”teased Sean. Then big Steve walked up, an even bigger kid that had moved into the neighbourhood.
He walked up behind Sean and gave him such a fright that Sean dropped the kid and the lunch box flung out of the kids hands and landed neatly in Sean’s. Big Steve was so big he was as big as a bus. He asked in a gruff voice. “Can Big Steve smell chicken nuggets?” Sean without answering threw the lunch box high into the air and it landed in his mouth, lunch box and all. “All gone “ he said smartly. This made Big Steve ferocious, he pulled a tin of pink paint out of the bag that was on his back, and held it above Sean’s head and poured it on top of Sean. Now Sean wasn’t in his green uniform he was now in his pink uniform. All the normal sized kids burst into fits of laughter. Big Steve looked at them and grumbled,”what are you kids laughing at? Lookout or you’ll be next.” The kids instantly stopped laughing and stepped back. The kids had, had enough of one big kid bossing them around but two! They just couldn’t handle them. It was time for the normal sized kids to fight back.
One of the kids took out a phone and looked up the number for chicken nuggets. The kid asked for a special delivery. A few seconds later a truck arrived in front of big Steve and Sean. Then they both gobbled it all up. But the chicken nuggets weren’t just normal chicken nuggets. They were super inflatable chicken nuggets! But they didn’t read the box, then Big Steve and Sean burped and started blowing up.Big Steve was terrified.” The normal kids said. “Jokes on you two it's volleyball time”and they floated away.”Oh oh this wasn’t supposed to happen” “It’s all your fault”sulked big Steve. “Yeah but you poured pink paint on me” “If you just gave me the chicken nuggets in the first place I wouldn’t of covered you in pink paint and we wouldn’t be here” said big Steve. They both were very disgusted at their bad behaviour towards the normal sized kids. “If we want to get out of here we will have to pop” said Sean. Big Steve didn’t like the idea he thought it would be to messy, but he
co - operated. Sean saw a satellite in a distance and so he took Big Steve’s hand and they floated to the satellite. They started swirling around and around. Finally they were at the satellite. Sean hesitated for a moment but then just flew at it and… Popped! They started flying at full speed onto New Zealand. When they landed they were the normal sized again. Big Steve had , had his bag on his back the whole time even when they were blowing up. The normal sized kids were getting to like Big Steve and Sean being there size and so asked if they wanted a game of something. The kid who Sean had stolen the chicken nuggets from said that he was keen to have a game. Life was going well now in Shantytown. That was until Big Stewart an even BIGGER kid came into the neighbourhood. Big Stewart was as big as a giant and everyone was afraid of him.
What a fantastic retell Charis. Your story was vivid, packed with info and it really made sense. Use your writing levels to being to think about your next steps.
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